5 Endurance,
Please elaborate and describe so that you can connect one sentence of your writing to another.
Example:
The fire spread and pandamonium broke out. The car driver quickly drove away from the building.
(Actually, i cannot penalise this two sentences. However, you should elaborate more and extend the first sentence so that it connects the two sentences better and gives the reader a more complete picture of what is going on.)
The fire spread and pandamonium broke out. Everyone was shouting, screaming and crying. They ran helter-skelter in many directions. Then, the car driver quickly drove away from the building.
(This second part would give a more detailed and complete picture of what had actually happened. The yellow section extended and gave a more complete picture of the pandamonium as described before.)
So you should follow this way to write in all your writing. Be it in compositions, situation writings, or science answers in section B of your exam paper.
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